Posted by: Colleen Owen Murphy | October 5, 2019

Do You Dare?

Do You Dare?

“I dare you, Sam, to trick-or-treat at Old Man Daniel’s place.
They say he killed a bear by hand and’s missing half his face.

“He never saw a doctor and the maggots, so they say,
are feeding off his open wounds and eating flesh away.”

“I’m not afraid of nothing and besides, it can’t be true.
If I decide to take this dare, what do I get from you?”

“I’ll give you all my candy, once you eat what he hands out;
he’ll give you juicy maggots from his bloody face, no doubt!”

“You’re on!” said Sam to Peter, “But you better keep your word!”
As secretly he prayed there was no truth to what he’d heard.

On Halloween, with fingers crossed, Sam knocked on Daniel’s door.
The man who answered’s face was hidden by the mask he wore.

Relieved, Sam took the candy, told him thanks and turned to run
and meet back up with Peter, glad this dare was almost done.

“All set!” he said, then showed him.

“Are you sure?” asked Peter, giggling

He raised the bag that Sam just got
“Your gummy worms are wiggling.”

This is an entry for an October challenge, Kidlit Fall Writing Frenzy hosted by Kaitlyn Leann Sanchez and Lydia Lukidis https://mathiseverywhere439319476.wordpress.com/2019/09/30/kidlit-fall-writing-frenzy/?fbclid=IwAR21ela92iv3xW8dCQLtiILdTKCjfgHeBhiw-YPB9wpX5BtLM4c_QKFnARM based on an image of gummy worms (image 8). I was limited to 200 words, and this comes in at 189.


Responses

  1. EWWWW!!!! I hate it when my gummy words wiggle.

    • But they had to in this case, didn’t they? Thank you for stopping by!

  2. Love the dare and the rhyme. A fun, spook read,

    • Thanks Kathy!

  3. Ooohhh…. Creepy story! Nicely done!

    • Thank you!

  4. Love this!! Great rhyming and great story! Good Luck!

    • Thank you Vasilla. I loved your take on the image you used for inspiration. Good luck with the contest!

  5. So gruesomely glorious! Well done, Colleen!

    • Thank you Cathy!

  6. I love a good dare, and I love a good creepy rhyme.God on you, Colleen!

    • Um…that should be Good! Though I’m sure the good Lord enjoyed your poem as well! Hahahahha!

      • I knew what you meant!! LOL. I appreciate the fact you stopped in to read my entry. The dare just seemed to be the right vehicle for this Halloween story.

  7. Lol! Love the unexpected ending! Nice!

    • Thanks Rachel!

  8. So gross but so perfect for Halloween! The rhyme gives it the flavor(!) of a folk song/tale. @AnneLipton

    • Ha ha! I don’t normally write gross material, but it couldn’t be helped here. Thanks for checking out my entry!

    • Anne, did you enter? If so, could you please provide a link so I can read your entry. I am doing what I can to read a lot of submissions, but I know I will not get to all of them!

  9. Loved your ending!

    • Thanks Melissa!

  10. Fun story! I can imagine the little boys daring each to go get the candy.

    • Thank you! I am glad it seemed plausible!

  11. This story really got me in the Halloween groove 🙂 .

    • I am glad it did! Thanks for stopping by Jennifer.

  12. This was so creepy and fun. I am super impressed by your rhyming.

    • Thank you!!

  13. Colleen, I love how we both picked up on the “dare” vibe. I would think the chances of that would be slim, but apparently not! LOL

    I love your concept, your rhymes, and the surprise ending. Good luck! 🙂

    • I guess rhyming, Halloween and dares kind of go together, but at least we took them in different directions!! Thanks for stopping by and for your kind comments!

  14. Loved reading your take on image #8!

    • Thanks Brittany!

  15. So much fun, Colleen! I always admire rhymers, and you’ve done it so well while incorporating gross-out imagery and humor. Well done!!

    • Ha ha! Thank you! I am looking forward to reading your entry.

  16. Haha! This is so great. Wonderful rhythm and so funny, I was hanging in anticipation from the start and love the ending. Good luck, Colleen, thanks so much for starting the competition off with a bang!

    • Thanks again for the opportunity Kaitlyn. I think your judging will be a challenge because there are going to be so many different styles. On the other hand, it will be fun to see the range of entries. Good luck with your contest!

      • You’re very welcome and agreed, with so many talented writers, it will be difficult!


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