Posted by: Colleen Owen Murphy | October 28, 2020

FIRST TIME JITTERS


The skeletons stared. The spiders crept.
With dinner downed, the children prepped
for trick-or-treat — well all except
the youngest, Tommy-Lee, who slept.

At least he closed his eyes and tried.
Those scary masks; the dark outside.
The prospects made him terrified.
“I’ve got a tummy ache,” he lied. 

The others knew their brother’s game
(In fact, Jolene had done the same.)
And so their mission now became
to set their brother’s feet aflame.

“Do you want buckets bulging through
with Reese’s Cups and Snickers too
with both of us protecting you?”
To that their brother said, “I do!”

99 words

This entry if for Susanna Hill’s 10th Annual Halloweensie contest. All are welcome to compete. Simply write a story, in 100 words or less, about Halloween, for children, using the words skeleton, mask and creep.

Doin’ The Skeleton Dance! Announcing The 10th Annual Halloweensie Writing Contest!

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Responses

  1. Fantastic! I absolutely love this! It’s something kids can definitely relate to.

    • Thank you so much! I hope you are right!

  2. It’s so sweet how encouraging the big siblings are.

    • Thanks Katie!

  3. I’d get up for Reese’s and Snickers, too!

    • Ha ha! Me too!!

  4. I like your rhyme scheme. And I love how the story progresses. I think my favorite line is: “to set their brother’s feet aflame.” LOL, that would be my brothers. Good luck!

    • Thanks for the comments and for stopping by to read my entry Jilanne! I am heading over to read your story now!

  5. Another great story, Colleen. I love your rhyme scheme and how the siblings offer to protect he to get the candy. Good luck!

    • Thank you Nancy! I cannot wait to read your entry!

  6. I’m so glad the siblings understood and helped. There is a nice dose of empathy in those 99 words.

    • Thank you! I just felt like, given the current state in our country, empathy was required.

  7. Great rhyming story. I love how his siblings sympathize, but candy always wins out! Cute ending.

    • Thanks for stopping by and for your kind comments!

  8. You just can’t resist the lure of treats! Such a cute story, Colleen! Best of luck in the contest!

    • Thanks Jill! Can’t wait to read your entry!

  9. This is is so sweet! It’s delightful to read aloud. Great job!

    • Thank you Sarah! Given the times, I wanted to try to write something a little more tender.

    • I tried to comment on your second story, but the site kept telling me it could not be posted. So, I am posting it here:

      I really like you have the role reversals in your story, and then the thoughtful sister who incorporates both siblings ideas into her own costume. Good luck!

  10. Aw, that was sweet, Colleen!

    • Thanks Colleen! LOL. Great name!

    • Colleen, I tried to post on your site, but Disqus was giving me issues. Here is my comment on your great entry:

      What a fun story! My daughter dresses up her cats all the time, so I understand Walter’s wish to escape! Good luck!

  11. It’s really clever the way you’ve constructed each verse around a single rhyme! I’m sure lots of children would empathise with little Tommy-Lee – loads of kid-appeal in this story – good luck!

    • Thanks Claire!

  12. I enjoyed this!

    • Thanks Melissa!

  13. I enjoyed this fun poem! Good luck in the contest.

    • Thanks!


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